I had seen the familiar look of silent exasperation on his face as I had come trotting up to his desk with that big stupid grin on my face which I know he dreads. I had seen the more inward frame of him barley tolerating me, like he does, turn into an awkward aversion when he had seen the cover. I had watched, with what I swear must have been the creepiest stare of giddy apprehension possible, as his mind connected the pensil behind my ear, to the sketchpad tucked beneath my arm, to the title of the giant tome-like book in my hands, to what must be the contents of said book, and finally to the spastically over-excited grin on my face.
Slamming his pen down on the desk, he had bolted to his feet to stand with such force that it sent his chair screeching back a half-foot before toppling over backwards to smack wooden and hollow on the equally wooden floor below. I had only once before seen his eyes flash like the way they did then, and it had not been directed at me, but at an unfortunate werecat. Scared, I had pulled the book closer to me in defense and the all-too-bubbly smile had disappeared completely from my face.


More terrifying when soft spoken than he could ever be yelling, he had seemed to loom towering above me as my own shoulders had shrunk in as I had quailed away from him, looking from the metallic gleam and focusing my own eyes on the brown stripes of the wooden floor. He had explained to me in a single word his exact feelings toward the changes the idea had suggested. Though the room was quite stocked full with my own things, that four-letter string of utter refusal had seemed to somehow echo throughout the room and reverberate back into my mind where it had bounced in the empty, thoughtless hollow.


Through the corner of my eye I saw him visibly lower his shoulders and step back. Daring to look again, I saw the disgruntlement on his face - a clear sign he had relaxed - and so I decided to risk tempting fate and try again. Blue-green eyes met silver and I took a breath, my face begging, pleading for a consent. "Please?" I asked, taking a step forward. He frowned, much more annoyed than ever angry. "Nein." He repeated firmly. "Please?" I almost whined. "Nein." Came his reply; and his voice began to raise. Flopping my shoulders and the book my tone changed to that of incredulity, "Come on, Doctor, please?"
Spreading his arms out wide in disbelief, as he rambled with this stubborn, unreasonable child, "Nein! No! How many languages do you vant me to say it in? I know vhat you're asking because I know what's in that book. I absolutely refuse to be a part of dass. It vould not be interesting, it vould not be intriguing, it vould not even hold mein attention. Utterly bland und entirely pointless. I do not wish to be anywhere associated vis dass blank, empty, overused, und absolutely uncharacteristic commonplace act which has been countless times before!"


Poking my lower lip out and hunching over, I gave up the vain idea and plopped the three-pound book on the desk with a simple "Oh."
The book's cover as it fell shone with the cursive golden lettering that spelled out it's title that had so disinterested him. Bound in dark leather and pinned with silver studs, the writing of the ancient writer's guide red a single word for it's heading: Clichés


Woo! Long story!
Well... not really. For a blog post, yes it is long, but for an author's standpoint, this was really quick to make.

Now you may be wondering what this is all about, so before I start my review, I need to give a little history. The two characters here consist of me and my own character Doctor Gabriel Fleischer. Dr. Fleischer is a character of mine who I often use in my animations. He's German (hence the accent) and spends most of his time studying those of the canine family. He also happens to be my most favorite out of all my characters I have, but that's a secret. So shh...! 
The setting here for my story is my own bedroom where the Doctor happens to be borrowing my desk as he works out some equations for his current study. The "world" I set this is in, is that little place in the back corner of any author/ artist's brain were they imagine their characters as if they were real. If you're not an author or an artist yourself, you may have a hard time understanding this, but if you happen to have an artistic friend - ask them. I promise you they'll tell you that they've imagined their characters were real at least once.

On to the review!
You may notice a sudden change of tense mid-story. That was purposeful. I wanted to add a bit of something extra to set it appart from my other writings. Also, I wanted to use that past-tense to describe what Dr. Fleischer and I might have as a relationship if he were real - given the fact that I, as a teenager, am the artist and he is the character.
On that note, I think that the same relationship is covered quite well in this particular piece. I did another, and admittedly quite darker, story regarding what relationship he (the character) and I (the artist) might have, but I do like this one much more. I admit that I do give him much more attention than my other characters, so I decided to work that into the short story here. Given his personality, I imagine that having a teenage girl fawn over you when you're trying to work would be quite annoying.

I don't want to necessarily praise my word choice, as that would sound far to egotistical, but I do want to say that I did spend some time and put a fair bit of thought into what words were used to add more color to this. Thesaurus, I love you.

Negativity:
This is one of my more favorite works of literature, so I find it a mite hard to critique it. One thing I will say, though, is that I have a problem with run-on sentences. Several of my friends commented on that when I showed this to them, but I left it in here. Also, I notice that I can sometimes go on a bit and detail things that might not necessarily need to be detailed. The chair falling, for example. I described the push, I described the sound of the push, I described it's decent, I described how it hit the floor, I described the sound it made, and I described the floor it hit. That seems like a bit much, dont' you think?
Finally, I do have a hard time balancing the Doctor's accent. When I first created him, his accent was so thick it was hard to even read what he was saying. Later on, I started creating some mental rules for when and where his accent should appear, but I still wasn't happy. Now, I'm starting to pull off just a touch more, but it seems I'm backing off too far. So, help with the accent would be appreciated.

That's it! Expect to see this guy more in the future, he is  my favorite character, after all.

Your turn! Critiques from the audience, GO!